In the holiday I went to the park, we ate fish and chips at the park. We play on the park with my baby brother , Bob and my sister, Anahera. We played with my brother, we went for walk back home with my mum. My dad got in the van and drove home.
When it was dark me and mum play on her phone. me play the game on Mindcraft with my Dad and when me and my Dad we get off the game we go to sleep in the morning. We go have eat KFC we fed the puppy. We had fun on the slide with my baby brother and my mum and my Dad.
WALHT write an interesting recount. I am trying to add more detail. next time I want to remember to add full stop
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